| 2018-02-07 21:33:05 |
Help! - The full story.
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Nice story. I liked it enough to click on the author's name and peruse more of what he's written. So, kudos. I write short fiction too, and this was a fun read. Unsolicited, but here's my request to fill a plot hole: couldn't there be more to the story of Danny's family? They're loving people and I had a hard time imagining them simply giving up Danny for the father's authoritarian mandate. Actually, dealing with the liberation of Danny's family from Danny's father would be a great place to start a sequel. Anyway, keep writing, my friend. :0) |