| 2019-01-09 23:04:22 |
The Rocker Part 7_(2)
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I like the story and the timing within your writing. The dialogue is believable save for the "I am", "do not", "she is" style. I don't believe people speaking American English are so formal.. We tend to "I'm" or "didn't" or "she's. I did like the story and I fond it to read as true rather than "made-up". |
| 2018-10-06 05:07:32 |
I'd Do It For You
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Sorry but this form of writing is not for me. Hemingway, I believe, said, "The adjective - when in doubt take it out." |
| 2018-10-06 05:11:21 |
E-Train
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Well done. I was put back in the 60's -- long story. Feel some of the beat writers when reading your offering. |
| 2018-10-06 05:14:09 |
If (Love Poem)
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Enjoy this type of poem when done well. You did good, IMO. Thanks |
| 2018-10-06 05:16:57 |
Tribute to Riley Reid
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The poem is directed towards a real person and the image she offers her public. Given this, you should have tried for more accuracy. |