| 2010-07-05 23:21:27 |
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Great story, keep it going |
| 2011-12-30 07:19:18 |
Secret Room 3
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Well this story just jumped the shark. That it ignored everything set up in the previous two installments didn't help either. I'll skip the rest. |
| 2012-01-15 05:24:24 |
It's better with lots of cream
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Good start and buildup but the end was rushed and had several mistakes (like was she tied up or not.. she was using her hands at times). Take your time, watch the pacing and proof read. |
| 2012-02-26 07:03:12 |
Young love_(3)
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Pretty good, not great. Some typos from relying on autocorrect rather than proofing. Quite a bit of lead up but then the climax was to quick and lacked descriptiveness |
| 2012-03-07 05:40:37 |
a long story
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I guess it is a "Dark and Stormy Night" where you are? Cut back on the descriptives a bit. |