| 2014-08-21 07:34:56 |
New Secretary Hailey
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Thanks for the posts. I should have mentioned when at the beginning of the story that I welcome constructive criticism. To be honest, I haven't written anything in years and after posting, I realized just how rusty I actually am. The comments about the proof-reading errors and the lack of plot/character development are definitely right. I rushed too much to get the story done and posted and focused far too much on the sexual aspects, several of which I actually forgot to include (I had them in my original version which I lost when my phone crashed) which would have explored the female leads past a little more. I'm hoping to write a sequel or two and flesh out the characters/story line some more. I may even re-write this story at some point to make it more palatable. |