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2015-07-27 06:40:08 One Big Horny Weasley Family- Chapter 01 The Morning After I'm the original author, I've moved this to a new site because the site that was hosting it has closed up shop. I am posting under a different name that doesn't track to my more public profiles.
2015-07-26 07:56:14 Harry Potter - Hermione enjoys the Weasley Twins One of the best treatments of this threesome that I've ever read. good job.
2015-07-17 04:11:37 Horny Hermione - The Beginning You should probably find a beta reader. I stopped reading 2 paragraphs in because of all the spelling mistakes.
2017-03-30 03:10:43 In The X-Mansion I can tell you without reading a word there's a couple of things you need to fix.
Paragraphs: without paragraph breaks it's just a walk of text, and nobody wants to wade through that.
Dialogue: new speakers generate new paragraphs, see above.
Space between paragraphs: I got roasted on this a couple of times. Trust me, it makes the story much more readable- especially in the default color scheme.
2017-03-25 05:47:58 Hermione and Ron finally together I've been a long time fan of R/Hr, and a good Hogwarts Era R/Hr story has a certain rhythm to it, a push/pull of expectation and disappointment. This is by far the best example I have seen in quite a while.
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