| 2009-01-19 22:19:17 |
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A great story indeed. Keep it up, can't wait for the next chapter. |
| 2014-12-09 07:22:10 |
Fate's Calling (Chapter 2)
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once again you forgot to have the woman remove her clothing. also in medieval times pills and clocks were not even thought up. they had salves and minor medical resources. so if there is going to be pills and clocks in this story along with any other item residing in more modern eras then you should explain that this story is not based on medieval times but on a more fantasy setting like Final fantasy or something. |
| 2009-09-14 03:40:40 |
Dude we totally did it
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First off WHAT THE FUCK? WHAT KIND OF PUNK ASS LITTLE BITCH THINKS HE SO DAMN GREAT THAT NO ONE CAN KICK HIS ASS? FUCK IF I KNEW SOME STUCK UP COCK SUCKER LIKE THAT I WOULD FUCKING DROP HIM. TORTURE HIS ASS TIL HE BEGGED ME TO KILL HIM. FUCK THIS STORY FUCKING SUCKED! |
| 2014-11-29 09:21:33 |
Genie in the lamp
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Here is a tip for you. if you are going to write something like this it is best to do some research and take your time figuring out the storyline. then reread your work do some editing and then post your story. while I admit to not being a perfect writer I still take time with my works of fiction. I read four lines of this and I CANNOT believe you are 43 years of age. Best thing to do is delete this story rewrite it after tinkering around with thoughts that will please your audience. only after that should you post this imitation of fantasy ever again. and don't follow the whole Disney Aladdin thing. |
| 2014-08-16 22:34:29 |
Dickgirl Diaries
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meant an eye lol damn cellphone |