| 2020-11-22 08:24:55 |
Happy Hour
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I see you have a problem with your grammar and composition. I found a rack of detail to be a problem as well. |
| 2020-11-22 08:46:14 |
The Satan's Child
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I thoroughly enjoyed the story mine, but I think you should have expanded the story to focus on the relationship with the mother. I think that you could benefit from having somebody read your story and make comments before you submit it. I hope you will keep up the good work. |
| 2020-11-22 10:23:05 |
Asian mom Jenny and her son Chris chapter 1 reuploaded
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I love the content of your story and look forward to reading more. I'd like to suggest that you get someone to proofread for you that can give you positive feedback on your writing. I am looking forward to reading more of this story. |
| 2020-11-22 11:56:01 |
Asian Mom Jenny and her son Chris part 2
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I don't know why you're telling the story. You need your structure and grammar. I'd suggest you check out Grammarly.com for help. |
| 2020-11-22 13:56:00 |
Asian Mom Jenny and her son Chris part 3
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I was so caught up in your story and I was so excited, but my excitement crack when she told her son that her tubes were tied. I was so sure that you would have him knocking her up. |