| 2015-09-05 10:45:33 |
Home wrecking latina.
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You've been told, pal. |
| 2015-09-05 10:14:57 |
Feeling Like Just Fucking
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Yeah, sort of pathetic, really. Someone suggested a writing class; good idea. |
| 2015-09-05 10:18:12 |
Me and Josh: Bathroom Fantasy_(1)
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Yeah, you been told, paragraphs. Maybe a writer's course too. Learn how it's done, and not just verbal diareah |
| 2015-09-08 12:05:27 |
The Hitchhiker (trial draft)
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Nice story, with a good storyline. Not fully believable? C'mon guys, this is fiction, and good entertainment as well. Life does not have all the Is dotted and the Tees crossed; so what the author has written is pretty lifelike. I hope to see a lot more from this writer. |
| 2015-09-08 12:29:08 |
Babysitting fun_(1)
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Beautiful, joyful and naughty. You are getting the hang of writing, and improving too. I enjoy your writing, and am amazed at your your youth, you show a maturity beyond your years. I'm glad that you don't follow the formula: meet, kiss, blowjob, fuck; so much of the writers on this site do, and it's so predictable and boring. Keep writing as you see it, sure, some improvements are needed, but they are minor. I continue to look forward to your next offering. |