| 2017-08-12 15:05:22 |
CLIFF AND THE TWINS
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JDD, I really liked this story; it has class and pathos, humour and sadness, just like real life. Not the kind of story that most of the readers here would appreciate, especially the drive for education as a means to break Pansy's boredom and the aims of the three main characters getting degrees. Please write more stories like this, there are some of us hete who do appreciate writing that tells a story rather than describes a series of sexual marathons. |
| 2015-09-01 13:15:02 |
A Victorian Pony Girl part 3
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Why this strange fixation with external vaginas? Or did you mean "vulvas", but too coy to say so? Poms don't have a problem with "vulvas" but silly Yanks do, so are you a psychotic yank or a silly psuedo-yank Pom? |
| 2015-08-27 17:33:29 |
BONNE BLUE EYES_(1)
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Good storyline; but still that grating "off of"; and I got a flash feeling that English is not your first language; if that's the case you are writing remarkably well. Do you use voice recognition to dictate your prose? |
| 2015-08-26 09:57:48 |
Amish No More
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Interesting, good storyline that ebbs and flows nicely; but proofreading is badly needed to correct some glaring oddities. Certainly not up to the standard of some of the other items, just too many flaws. |
| 2015-09-01 10:34:21 |
Can you forgive me?
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This is a story that really needs finishing. I know, your total lack of commitment to anything that requires a mature act of completion and finality is beyond your immature development, but grow up, and show a bit of maturity. |